He took her to his private place
in a wooded area;
he sedated her so she could not move.
He undressed her, ripping her clothing.
He forced her to watch as he plunged the knife deep into her bare stomach.
she didn’t last long, in minutes she was gone.
He came twice.
Luckily the soil was easy to dig.
He lay her in a shallow grave
and prayed for her soul.
This life he learned
from his father;
who would be proud like no other
if his boy’s first victim were not
his very own mother.
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this creepy little tale is my take on this week’s photo prompt on Rochelle Wisoff-Fields’ Friday Fictioneers.
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The CW had a limited TV series in 2016-17 based on a 2000 movie called Frequency. Basically, a freak accident allows a 1996 NYPD homicide detective Frank Sullivan to use his Ham radio to communicate with his daughter Raimy in 2016. Raimy is also a homicide detective and they end up investigating the same serial killer across two decades, one who, from Raimy’s point of view, murdered her mother, but from Frank’s point of view hasn’t done so yet.
The reason I’m mentioning it here is that in 1996, it’s one serial killer but in 2016, his son has picked up the mantle. I’m sorry the show was cancelled because it was tough, dark, gritty, and compelling.
Wow! So well written!
A very very sick family… I suspect it’s just the beginning.
and also maybe the beginning of a series of stories based on this story, which was a nightmare I had last night after eating pizza before bed
Pizza can in itself be a nightmare… and now you had me thinking of Sweeney Todd and meat pies
yes, I have that effect on people…
You had me thinking of days long ago in Greece. And classical writing.
Hell’s bells, that woke me up! 😦
This was repulsive to read. I loved it. 😀
thanks…I think
Not the easiest of reads I have to say! Brilliantly written though.
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thanks
I’m afraid I didn’t like that at all.
I write happy stories as well, stay tuned. thanks for reading
Like the TV show you like this was tough, dark, gritty and compelling. Nicely written piece.
thanks for reading
I liked the writing, it is gritty and effective. But the content is sickening, as you intended, I’m sure. 🙂
for sure
That was horrible!! What a terrible story. You wrote it well though, I have to give you that! :o) I can honestly say that no one has repulsed me so much in so few words. :o) Top marks!
Your comment will go down in history as the best/worst comment ever. Thanks for reading, didn’t mean to repulse you, just had to write what was in my head. I promise my next story will be an easier read.
Yikes. It just got worse with every word, but no way was I going to stop reading! Hoo boy, I glad that’s overwith!
Thanks for making it all the way to the end. The comments on this story have been hilarious
Yes. Well, it was pretty stark. And somehow, the victim being his own mother turned it into a totally dark and scary place.
sometimes I don’t know where I get those stories. I am a sweetheart, really
:O
This was gruesome, gross, and fabulously written. So well, I hope you have no such compulsions!
naw, not me. I was as repulsed as the rest of you after I read what I wrote. thanks for reading
That’s a relief!!
Well, yikes! Definitely gritty.